Comments on: A STAR’S SEDUCTION • by Suanne Warr http://www.everydayfiction.com/a-stars-seduction-by-suanne-warr/ The once a day flash fiction magazine. Fri, 19 Mar 2010 13:14:59 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: Bill Webb http://www.everydayfiction.com/a-stars-seduction-by-suanne-warr/comment-page-1/#comment-21620 Bill Webb Sun, 31 Jan 2010 01:08:26 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/a-star-by-suanne-warr/#comment-21620 Sorry but I couldn't get past 100 words. These are not my kind of stories. Sorry but I couldn’t get past 100 words. These are not my kind of stories.

]]> By: Edward Caputo http://www.everydayfiction.com/a-stars-seduction-by-suanne-warr/comment-page-1/#comment-10254 Edward Caputo Thu, 04 Dec 2008 14:50:14 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/a-star-by-suanne-warr/#comment-10254 There's a lot to like in this story: its tension, characterization and humor all stand out and I found the core conflict compelling. But it didn't quite work for me. The reason I think, is due to the unfamiliar (made up?) words and concepts introduced too quickly (e.g. gremleen, uthanor). With a longer treatment (where such terms and concepts can be properly woven in), they might have immersed me; instead they were very distracting. A flash needs everything possible brought in by the reader. 'Familiar' and 'Mirror' would've gotten the job done better. There’s a lot to like in this story: its tension, characterization and humor all stand out and I found the core conflict compelling.

But it didn’t quite work for me. The reason I think, is due to the unfamiliar (made up?) words and concepts introduced too quickly (e.g. gremleen, uthanor). With a longer treatment (where such terms and concepts can be properly woven in), they might have immersed me; instead they were very distracting.

A flash needs everything possible brought in by the reader. ‘Familiar’ and ‘Mirror’ would’ve gotten the job done better.

]]> By: jennifer walmsley http://www.everydayfiction.com/a-stars-seduction-by-suanne-warr/comment-page-1/#comment-10151 jennifer walmsley Sat, 29 Nov 2008 05:21:07 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/a-star-by-suanne-warr/#comment-10151 I enjoyed this magical tale. I enjoyed this magical tale.

]]> By: New Story Up at Tales from the Raven http://www.everydayfiction.com/a-stars-seduction-by-suanne-warr/comment-page-1/#comment-10148 New Story Up at Tales from the Raven Fri, 28 Nov 2008 16:59:55 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/a-star-by-suanne-warr/#comment-10148 [...] A Star, aka A Star’s Seduction, is up at EDF.  This is one of several stories I’ve written in my world of magic and mechanics, diverse kinds of humans, underwater mer, and meru (half human, half mer), plus all of the magically enhanced and altered creatures which inhabit the world.  Enjoy! [...] [...] A Star, aka A Star’s Seduction, is up at EDF.  This is one of several stories I’ve written in my world of magic and mechanics, diverse kinds of humans, underwater mer, and meru (half human, half mer), plus all of the magically enhanced and altered creatures which inhabit the world.  Enjoy! [...]

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