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BRIDGE AND TUNNEL • by Ian Breen

At the trial, Vernon would deny befriending RT just to get access to the bridge controls. Admitting it, even to himself, would be admitting he had used RT, planned things ahead of time, and that was something he couldn’t accept. RT was just a nice old guy he met one evening while strolling across the Highlands Bridge, ice cream cone in hand, trying to decide what to do about Cindy.

It was one of those glorious late August evenings, the sky over the Atlantic a swirl of red and bruise-purple clouds, the breeze still warm but free of the day’s dog-breath humidity. As he walked, melted rum-raisin dribbling from the soggy tip of his sugar cone, his eyes traced lines between the stones in the concrete that made up the bridge deck. Visualizing paths between points was something he had done since he was a kid in school, when he would spend half the class randomly dotting his notebook paper and then looking for patterns, for meaning, in the act of connection. The rough surface of the bridge scuffed under his flip-flops, and he found himself whistling a tune. Something by Springsteen, one Jersey boy at least who’d made good.

Vernon trailed his hand along the railing and looked down at the choppy water, where sunset-limned waves flickered like a million opening and closing mouths. Passing the drawbridge control house, a squat, obelisk-shaped tower to the side of the bridge deck, he noticed the door was open. On impulse, he stepped inside. There was a humming in the air, as of distant machinery, and the smell of salt water-swelled wood.

“Hello?” he said.

Floating down a spiral staircase from the second floor, a raspy voice called, “Hello. Can I help you?”

He didn’t have an answer. Could anyone help him? That was self-pitying, melodramatic bullshit, but he wondered. His best friend was in the desert on his fifth tour, dodging IEDs and trusting that Cindy was waiting at home, and Vernon had just learned she was sleeping with some guy she’d met in a for-Christ’s-sake chatroom. But the worst part, the most disgusting, gut-wrenching part, was that he wished she was cheating with him, instead.

“Can I come up?” Vernon asked.

A moment later, a pair of bait-spattered work boots appeared through the open hatch in the ceiling and started down. Vernon saw fish scales and what might have been the puckered disc of an eye dried on the toes. The man wore a tartan cap pulled low over his gray hair, and an unlit pipe protruded from between his teeth. He got to the bottom and extended his hand. “Evening. Name’s RT.”

“Hi,” Vernon said. “I’ve walked past this place hundreds of times since I was a kid, and I’ve always wanted to come in and see how it worked. You mind if I take a look around?”

“Not a bit,” RT said. “You from around here?”

“Sea Bright. Born and raised.”

“Good man.”

RT brought Vernon upstairs to see the control console. While they were at the board, a sailboat approached from the Sandy Hook inlet to the east and blew its airhorn twice. RT responded with three slow blasts from the bridge’s horn, using a large black button polished smooth by seventy years of palms. He flipped a switch that started a yellow-to-red sequence on the bridge traffic lights and motioned to Vernon. “Help me swing the gates across the deck and I’ll show you how I open it.”

The two sets of heavy iron gates, painted red and splotched with rust, turned on pivots and locked together in the middle of the road. Once those circuits were connected, RT was able to use another panel of buttons just inside the tower doorway to open the bridge. Vernon stood with his new friend and watched as the arms slowly rose, imagining the huge cement counterweights tracing opposite arcs beneath the bridge. It was only as the boat glided through, its thin, fragile mast visible through the cross-hatched metal decking, that Vernon remembered Cindy’s new sugar daddy, the Asshole from Asbury, owned a sailboat, too.


Ian Breen lives and writes in Western Massachusetts. His fiction has appeared in Black Heart Magazine and Storyglossia and is forthcoming in Lady Churchill’s Rosebud Wristlet. He can be found online at www.ianbreen.com.


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BRIDGE AND TUNNEL • by Ian Breen, 3.3 out of 5 based on 19 ratings
Posted on February 16, 2013 in Mystery/Suspense, Stories
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  • http://www.chaucers-uncle.weebly.com Paul A. Freeman

    A nicely rounded story, but I was wondering how RT let the narrator mess with the controls, and if doing so would have been fatal to those in the sailboat – if indeed it was a murder trial.

    One quibble on language – I’m not sure how you’d dodge an IED.

    Anyhow, I loved the descriptions of the bridge, RT and the general atmosphere.

  • http://Taralaskowski.com Tara

    Very nicely written piece and very controlled. The story is framed perfectly and I love the description of this moment where everything changes. Lovely.

  • http://Www.rite2run.wordpress.com Jim Brennan

    Good story development, smart visual descriptions, great ending.

  • http://www.dirkknight.com Dirk Knight

    I enjoyed this and was glad to see jodi get his in the end.

    My only issue was the phrasing of where she met jodi..

    In a for-Christ-sakes chatroom….. it is a chat room about jesus?
    In a chat room, for chist sakes.
    For christ sakes, in a chatroom. Either works better than as it is written, to me.

    For those who don’t follow, “Jodi” is what American troops :all the guy who keeps thier girls wa while they are away.

  • http://www.dirkknight.com Dirk Knight

    *keep thier girls warm while they are away*

  • http://www.jmiklos.com Johanna Miklos

    I don’t see the development or the great ending. The ice cream cone,the fish scales on the boots and the cap: precious words wasted on irrelevance.
    I agree with the comment about not messing with controls.
    I don’t understand the “Jodi” comment. Vernon wishes he could be a “Jodi” but obviously isn’t.

  • http://www.ajcapper.com Amanda

    What I really like about this story, is how it continues on in my head. I know the future holds a trial for Vernon, so I know he must arrange for ‘jodi’ (thanks, Mr. Knight)to be murdered, premediation starting at the end of the story. Very cool.

    The descriptions helped a lot in picturing these characters. One, a plain, hard-working man who operates a bridge; the second, another apparently plain man, but one who surprises himself by being capable of murder. Hates himself for lusting after his friend’s wife but decides killing his rival is justified. Complex and simple at the same time. Very cool.

    My only beef is the amount of hyphenated words. I really had to dig to find that beef.

  • Joanne

    Agree completely with Amanda’s first two paragraphs (#7). Very complex and wonderfully descriptive. I like how the ending leads back to the beginning.

  • http://canyonsofgray.blogspot.com dj barber

    Great visuals and nice circle from ending back to opening.

    –dj

  • Rob

    This was a good piece. Telling the end before the beginning worked because of the abrupt shift in the end (A very good idea) my only real complaint was paragraph#2. While it was well written, it didn’t move the story anywhere. It made the flow stall– for me anyway– while every other paragraph moved the story forward.
    Cutting it would’ve left the readers not knowing: the weather, the texture of the bridge, what the MC did as a child in school, and that he was whistling.
    I’ll bet, as good as the author is, he could’ve slipped any of those items that he felt were truly important into one of the other sections that is moving the story.
    So a -* for the scene-setting info dump, but a +* for putting up with my editorial nit-picks.
    Good story

  • JenM

    Excellent story, Ian! Five stars from me.

  • joannab.

    This story just didn’t do it for me. I kept trying to “see” what was going on, but was sidetracked by extraneous detail. Also I wondered at why RT would be so accomodating in showing Vernon the way to work the bridge when they had just met. I finally got that the timing was the trial placed at the beginning but happening at the very end, that the day being described was not the day that Vernon killed the Asshole from Asbury (or was it?), and that Vernon thought if he did kill the guy, then he (Vernon) would get Cindy (or was it revenge for his friend?). I think the author “sees” the story clearly himself, but for me at least, I was confused and had to work too hard at sorting things out.

  • Mariev Finnegan

    12: joannab says it all for me.

  • http://astheheroflies.wordpress.com/ Gretchen Bassier

    Some really masterful descriptions. I could picture everything. Well done.

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