Mon 16 Aug 2010
How not to write a thriller
Posted by Jim Harrington under advice, craft, plot
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I watched a summer TV show earlier this week that opened with the bad guy kidnapping and threatening to kill THE STAR of the show. It was at this point that I fetched my copy of Ellery Queen Mystery Magazine and started reading a new story.
How gullible do these writers think we viewers are? It’s the fourth week of a six to eight week run and their killing off THE STAR? Not going to happen (unless THE STAR is leaving the show, but we’d have read about that in People weeks before the show aired). This plotline is used often in TV shows, and maybe this recycling of story lines is another reason why people are turning off their televisions. In addition, to rephrase an old commercial, where’s the suspense?
Steve Almond, in This Won’t Take But a Minute, Honey, provides an excellent example of what suspense is in his chapter “Suspense Vs Surprise.” Yes, I’m stealing Steve’s idea, but he claims to have stolen it from Bruce Machart, whom Steve assumes stole it from someone else. Anyway, here’s a paraphrase of Steve’s idea of a surprise.
Steve walks into his class, gives his lecture, and at the end of the class, pulls a gun from his briefcase and shoots one of the students.
I would say that qualifies as a surprise. Here’s his example of suspense.
Steve walks into his class, removes a Colt Python .357 Magnum Revolver from his briefcase, lays it on the desk, and begins his lecture.
“Umm… Mr. Almond?” I say, raising the hand of the person sitting next to me. “May I be excused to go to the bathroom?” Oh yea, that’s suspense.
Mr. Almond (I always address men with big guns “Mr.” You don’t?) ends the chapter with this wonderful quote.
“What brings us to stories, the ultimate source of suspense, isn’t what happens, but how and why it happens.”
And our character must be in a believable situation for the suspense to work.
Hmm, I wonder if the quote works if I substitute “tension” for “suspense.” What do you think?
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Jim discovered flash fiction in 2007, and he’s read, written, studied, and agonized over the form since. His Six Questions For blog provides editors and publishers a place to “tell it like it is.” In his spare time, he serves as the flash fiction editor for Apollo’s Lyre .



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Good post.
I think as well as the how? and why?, the will it happen or not? can provide a lot of suspense too.
Nice reminder of the elements of thrilers and mysteries. It would be good to have a Thought for the Day calendar–or RSS feed–reminding writers of the basics.
Thanks for this Jim. I so appreciate your contributions to FFC. I hope everyone will take the time to check out your Six Questions For blog!
How not to is as important as how to. Who wants the reader to say “Saw that coming!”?
Good one, Jim!
Many of today’s TV writers seem to have lost their creativity. Or the corporate sponsors have killed it.
They’re mistaking the wondering of HOW the star defeats the bad guy for good suspense. When I used to watch “Murder She Wrote,” it became a game to predict who the bad guy was and watch for the clues they’d drop. The bad guy was always the better known of the guest actors for that show. Now, THAT is bad casting. The suspense there was the WHY, not the WHO.
If you couple poor casting with poor suspense, you get today’s formula for many series that last a couple of months and then are gone.
Ha! Love the remarks about the TV, Jim!