Comments on: GAME ON • by Gwendolyn Joyce Mintz http://www.everydayfiction.com/game-on-by-gwendolyn-joyce-mintz/ The once a day flash fiction magazine. Sun, 14 Mar 2010 18:01:08 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: Pete http://www.everydayfiction.com/game-on-by-gwendolyn-joyce-mintz/comment-page-1/#comment-19426 Pete Mon, 16 Nov 2009 21:09:04 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/game-on-by-gwendolyn-joyce-mintz/#comment-19426 I liked the writing and the form, although no quotes did get messy there for a moment when swoitching between internal perspective and then two different speaking voices. But okay. Unfortunatly I also agree that theres a lack of 'middle' or 'flashpoint' or one of the much better terms people have already said. I liked the writing and the form, although no quotes did get messy there for a moment when swoitching between internal perspective and then two different speaking voices. But okay.

Unfortunatly I also agree that theres a lack of ‘middle’ or ‘flashpoint’ or one of the much better terms people have already said.

]]> By: Debi Blood http://www.everydayfiction.com/game-on-by-gwendolyn-joyce-mintz/comment-page-1/#comment-19415 Debi Blood Mon, 16 Nov 2009 16:12:37 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/game-on-by-gwendolyn-joyce-mintz/#comment-19415 I love the way the dialog told this story. Very inventive; I didn't miss the quotation marks at all. An excellent vignette of one day in one child's life. I love the way the dialog told this story. Very inventive; I didn’t miss the quotation marks at all. An excellent vignette of one day in one child’s life.

]]> By: Nancy Wilcox http://www.everydayfiction.com/game-on-by-gwendolyn-joyce-mintz/comment-page-1/#comment-19411 Nancy Wilcox Mon, 16 Nov 2009 15:22:21 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/game-on-by-gwendolyn-joyce-mintz/#comment-19411 I enjoyed this one. No, there isn't a lot of story, but the character is well-delineated. The situation is strongly visual, and all together well done. I enjoyed this one. No, there isn’t a lot of story, but the character is well-delineated. The situation is strongly visual, and all together well done.

]]> By: Sharon http://www.everydayfiction.com/game-on-by-gwendolyn-joyce-mintz/comment-page-1/#comment-19352 Sharon Sun, 15 Nov 2009 07:06:47 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/game-on-by-gwendolyn-joyce-mintz/#comment-19352 Bob said it best. No hits, no runs, no errors, no story. Bob said it best. No hits, no runs, no errors, no story.

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