Comments on: INTERMISSION • by Jann Everard http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/ The once a day flash fiction magazine. Thu, 29 Jul 2010 20:25:17 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.0 By: JanuaryGrey http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/comment-page-1/#comment-12459 JanuaryGrey Sun, 15 Feb 2009 02:20:23 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/#comment-12459 Beautifully written. Beautifully written.

]]> By: Submission http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/comment-page-1/#comment-11940 Submission Tue, 27 Jan 2009 18:31:18 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/#comment-11940 Just a note on commenting, directed at a commentators whose comment has been unapproved. We encourage readers to share their thoughts, even negative thoughts and criticisms, however the comments thread is not a place for name calling or personal vendettas. Just a note on commenting, directed at a commentators whose comment has been unapproved.

We encourage readers to share their thoughts, even negative thoughts and criticisms, however the comments thread is not a place for name calling or personal vendettas.

]]> By: Kanchana http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/comment-page-1/#comment-11758 Kanchana Tue, 20 Jan 2009 07:32:26 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/#comment-11758 very good choice of words to depict the lady's emotion. kept me glued to the story till the end. very good style of writing! very good choice of words to depict the lady’s emotion. kept me glued to the story till the end. very good style of writing!

]]> By: Madeleine http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/comment-page-1/#comment-11757 Madeleine Tue, 20 Jan 2009 04:12:16 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/#comment-11757 Very nice. I'm wondering what her biggest lie to Alan was? Very nice. I’m wondering what her biggest lie to Alan was?

]]> By: Alan Beard http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/comment-page-1/#comment-11741 Alan Beard Mon, 19 Jan 2009 12:30:05 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/#comment-11741 good one, well written good one, well written

]]> By: Glennis http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/comment-page-1/#comment-11740 Glennis Mon, 19 Jan 2009 12:24:35 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/#comment-11740 My heart was beating throughout this story - felt like I was there with her and had to make that choice myself - loved it! My heart was beating throughout this story – felt like I was there with her and had to make that choice myself – loved it!

]]> By: Bob http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/comment-page-1/#comment-11722 Bob Sat, 17 Jan 2009 22:41:16 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/#comment-11722 "Sending him her breath through kiss-shaped lips." Beautiful! What a perfect image for sending him back into her past. I really, really liked the way you brought out the drama and struggle in a mundane life-moment. Everybody runs into old flames at some time in their lives - the sense of regret and what-might-have-been is universal. Lise's quiet triumph was wonderfully presented. A five from me. “Sending him her breath through kiss-shaped lips.” Beautiful! What a perfect image for sending him back into her past.

I really, really liked the way you brought out the drama and struggle in a mundane life-moment. Everybody runs into old flames at some time in their lives – the sense of regret and what-might-have-been is universal. Lise’s quiet triumph was wonderfully presented. A five from me.

]]> By: Madeline Mora-Summonte http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/comment-page-1/#comment-11721 Madeline Mora-Summonte Sat, 17 Jan 2009 21:19:19 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/#comment-11721 I love this image - "Lise smoothed the burnished gold satin of her dress. She felt like a small sun, warm and lustrous." Nice work! I love this image – “Lise smoothed the burnished gold satin of her dress. She felt like a small sun, warm and lustrous.” Nice work!

]]> By: dj barber http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/comment-page-1/#comment-11719 dj barber Sat, 17 Jan 2009 19:02:10 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/#comment-11719 Excellent flow and voice. Nice story well told --dj Excellent flow and voice. Nice story well told

–dj

]]> By: Judy http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/comment-page-1/#comment-11717 Judy Sat, 17 Jan 2009 18:22:48 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/intermission-by-jann-everard/#comment-11717 Well done. Nicely written. Well done. Nicely written.

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