http://www.everydayfiction.com/layaway-by-jameson-parker/ The once a day flash fiction magazine. Thu, 18 Mar 2010 16:37:10 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 http://www.everydayfiction.com/layaway-by-jameson-parker/comment-page-1/#comment-19972 Sarah Clarke Fri, 04 Dec 2009 20:15:31 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/layaway-by-jameson-parker/#comment-19972 I really like this story, I like the emotion in it. It's hard for a lot of people to see past a the words and see the story. I agree with Rachel, I'm pretty sure you can write anything. I really like this story, I like the emotion in it. It’s hard for a lot of people to see past a the words and see the story. I agree with Rachel, I’m pretty sure you can write anything.

]]> http://www.everydayfiction.com/layaway-by-jameson-parker/comment-page-1/#comment-19908 Bernard Wed, 02 Dec 2009 22:59:49 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/layaway-by-jameson-parker/#comment-19908 We really are a tough bunch, aren't we? We really are a tough bunch, aren’t we?

]]> http://www.everydayfiction.com/layaway-by-jameson-parker/comment-page-1/#comment-19903 Lisa C. Wed, 02 Dec 2009 20:49:39 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/layaway-by-jameson-parker/#comment-19903 I agree with J.C (#8) and Sharon (#9). There's a nice kernel of a story here, but it needs some serious editing. The continuity problems that J.C. and others mention, plus more than a few incidents of really clunky prose makes this one a no-go for me. I agree with J.C (#8) and Sharon (#9). There’s a nice kernel of a story here, but it needs some serious editing. The continuity problems that J.C. and others mention, plus more than a few incidents of really clunky prose makes this one a no-go for me.

]]> http://www.everydayfiction.com/layaway-by-jameson-parker/comment-page-1/#comment-19844 Bernard Tue, 01 Dec 2009 00:20:29 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/layaway-by-jameson-parker/#comment-19844 A good story. Not perfect: and many other comments go into this. Even those that think the story needs more work have felt compelled to comment. I think this fact is testament to a story that communicates emotion. A good story. Not perfect: and many other comments go into this. Even those that think the story needs more work have felt compelled to comment. I think this fact is testament to a story that communicates emotion.

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