Comments on: SHADOWS IN FLIGHT • by Rob Haines http://www.everydayfiction.com/shadows-in-flight-by-rob-haines/ The once a day flash fiction magazine. Fri, 19 Mar 2010 23:52:52 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: Roberta SchulbergGoro http://www.everydayfiction.com/shadows-in-flight-by-rob-haines/comment-page-1/#comment-11926 Roberta SchulbergGoro Tue, 27 Jan 2009 11:06:50 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/?p=894#comment-11926 Sorry - valkyries, not valkeries: Supernatural female welcomers of valorous males to the heaven. Sorry – valkyries, not valkeries:
Supernatural female welcomers of valorous males to the heaven.

]]> By: TW http://www.everydayfiction.com/shadows-in-flight-by-rob-haines/comment-page-1/#comment-11916 TW Mon, 26 Jan 2009 19:47:30 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/?p=894#comment-11916 Well-crafted, but lack of resolution leaves this reader scratching his head. Who was right, who was wrong? Who gained, who lost? The author should be sure the reader "gets it." Perhaps this reader is too dense! Well-crafted, but lack of resolution leaves this reader scratching his head.

Who was right, who was wrong? Who gained, who lost?

The author should be sure the reader “gets it.” Perhaps this reader is too dense!

]]> By: Roberta SchulbergGoro http://www.everydayfiction.com/shadows-in-flight-by-rob-haines/comment-page-1/#comment-11908 Roberta SchulbergGoro Mon, 26 Jan 2009 15:42:52 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/?p=894#comment-11908 Its the slauph who mentioned rotting in the ground, not Margaret. I pay my respects to all ethos and would not, for anything, trouble Margaret's deep respect for soul, but in this case, the slaughs turn out to be the better recyclists. Its the slauph who mentioned rotting in the ground, not Margaret. I pay my respects to all ethos and would not, for anything, trouble Margaret’s deep respect for soul, but in this case, the slaughs turn out to be the better recyclists.

]]> By: kristy http://www.everydayfiction.com/shadows-in-flight-by-rob-haines/comment-page-1/#comment-11903 kristy Mon, 26 Jan 2009 13:56:38 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/?p=894#comment-11903 I'm with the readers that liked the ambiguity. I think without it the story would have been uninteresting. The ambiguity forces the reader to think about his/her own beliefs about death and the afterlife. You do need to fix the funeral pyre versus burial discrepency. Also, to be really picky (because it really was such a great story) I found the second paragraph to be a little clunky. I’m with the readers that liked the ambiguity. I think without it the story would have been uninteresting. The ambiguity forces the reader to think about his/her own beliefs about death and the afterlife.

You do need to fix the funeral pyre versus burial discrepency. Also, to be really picky (because it really was such a great story) I found the second paragraph to be a little clunky.

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