Comments on: THE ART OF STEALING SHARKS • by Christian Bell http://www.everydayfiction.com/the-art-of-stealing-sharks-by-christian-bell/ The once a day flash fiction magazine. Sat, 20 Mar 2010 09:46:00 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: Ian Rochford http://www.everydayfiction.com/the-art-of-stealing-sharks-by-christian-bell/comment-page-1/#comment-19338 Ian Rochford Sat, 14 Nov 2009 03:51:07 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/the-art-of-stealing-sharks-by-christian-bell/#comment-19338 I'm with Michael, I enjoyed the boldness of the idea and the eye you have for quirky details. Maybe a tad overwritten in spots (“But Gustav had chiseled him into the man and shark-stealing artist he now claimed to be.” – the last phrase doesn’t feel right), but has good pace, if a slightly muddled structure. The ending let me down on two counts: it didn’t feel adequately set up (the Gustav resemblance wasn’t enough), and I didn’t buy the aerial Swat-style takedown for such an offense. But hey, it held my attention and I didn’t get picky until afterwards! I’m with Michael, I enjoyed the boldness of the idea and the eye you have for quirky details. Maybe a tad overwritten in spots (“But Gustav had chiseled him into the man and shark-stealing artist he now claimed to be.” – the last phrase doesn’t feel right), but has good pace, if a slightly muddled structure.

The ending let me down on two counts: it didn’t feel adequately set up (the Gustav resemblance wasn’t enough), and I didn’t buy the aerial Swat-style takedown for such an offense.

But hey, it held my attention and I didn’t get picky until afterwards!

]]> By: Michael J. Solender http://www.everydayfiction.com/the-art-of-stealing-sharks-by-christian-bell/comment-page-1/#comment-19270 Michael J. Solender Mon, 09 Nov 2009 21:32:00 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/the-art-of-stealing-sharks-by-christian-bell/#comment-19270 I'm not one to over think these things. That said, I thoroughly enjoyed it with all its little nuances and barbs. I especially liked the menu of offerings to the potential shark buyer. He should have been clued in something was up when he turned down coconut shrimp and chocolate cake. You certainly succeed in taking the reader intro a realm outside the norm, that you have such wide disparity in opinions on your piece is also indicative to me of a well written piece - they are talking about it. I’m not one to over think these things. That said, I thoroughly enjoyed it with all its little nuances and barbs. I especially liked the menu of offerings to the potential shark buyer. He should have been clued in something was up when he turned down coconut shrimp and chocolate cake. You certainly succeed in taking the reader intro a realm outside the norm, that you have such wide disparity in opinions on your piece is also indicative to me of a well written piece – they are talking about it.

]]> By: DebE http://www.everydayfiction.com/the-art-of-stealing-sharks-by-christian-bell/comment-page-1/#comment-19267 DebE Mon, 09 Nov 2009 20:28:11 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/the-art-of-stealing-sharks-by-christian-bell/#comment-19267 And so? And so?

]]> By: Rick O'Donnell http://www.everydayfiction.com/the-art-of-stealing-sharks-by-christian-bell/comment-page-1/#comment-19266 Rick O'Donnell Mon, 09 Nov 2009 19:41:25 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/the-art-of-stealing-sharks-by-christian-bell/#comment-19266 I was waiting for a surprise ending that never came. I was waiting for a surprise ending that never came.

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