Comments on: THE CAT WON’T STOP PLAYING • by Selena Thomason http://www.everydayfiction.com/the-cat-wont-stop-playing-by-selena-thomason/ The once a day flash fiction magazine. Fri, 19 Mar 2010 23:52:52 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: Selena T http://www.everydayfiction.com/the-cat-wont-stop-playing-by-selena-thomason/comment-page-1/#comment-8901 Selena T Sun, 21 Sep 2008 21:32:29 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/?p=479#comment-8901 Thanks, Caner. It was fun to venture away from my usual scifi. And I think you're right that stretching makes us better writers. Thanks, Caner.

It was fun to venture away from my usual scifi. And I think you’re right that stretching makes us better writers.

]]> By: Resha Caner http://www.everydayfiction.com/the-cat-wont-stop-playing-by-selena-thomason/comment-page-1/#comment-8898 Resha Caner Sun, 21 Sep 2008 17:13:35 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/?p=479#comment-8898 Hi Selena, I like your little foray away from speculative writing. I do the same, and I've always thought it makes for a better writer. Caner Hi Selena,

I like your little foray away from speculative writing. I do the same, and I’ve always thought it makes for a better writer.

Caner

]]> By: Selena T http://www.everydayfiction.com/the-cat-wont-stop-playing-by-selena-thomason/comment-page-1/#comment-8890 Selena T Sun, 21 Sep 2008 14:53:01 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/?p=479#comment-8890 Teresa, thanks for your comments. They certainly are helpful. I will keep the pitfalls you mentioned in mind as I continue working on my craft. Thanks again, and best wishes for your own writing journey and continued success. Teresa, thanks for your comments. They certainly are helpful. I will keep the pitfalls you mentioned in mind as I continue working on my craft.

Thanks again, and best wishes for your own writing journey and continued success.

]]> By: Teresa Koeppel http://www.everydayfiction.com/the-cat-wont-stop-playing-by-selena-thomason/comment-page-1/#comment-8887 Teresa Koeppel Sun, 21 Sep 2008 12:16:24 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/?p=479#comment-8887 While there were some good lines in here, a lot of the interactions and thoughts didn't ring quite true to me. I found the name of the cat, Fluffy, to be distractingly ordinary (it seems kind of like Jones - I know there are Fluffys out there, I've just never met one), and I also got pulled out by sentences like "Her mother was crying!" and "Was Mom jealous of the cat, too?" Those kinds of things were already in evidence by the descriptions/conversations at hand and didn't necessarily need to be repeated. It seemed like a very quick and unrealistic resolution to a huge issue (Elaine is worried that her mother doesn't love her) at the end. The reason I'm writing all of this is because I found some good writing in this story as well - sentences that were well-crafted and dug into things in a way I didn't expect and was gratified to find. And all the faults I listed are things I do in my work, too, and am always trying to be aware of. Hopefully, this was a helpful comment of some things to think about. Either way, good job on getting published in EDF and thanks for the story! While there were some good lines in here, a lot of the interactions and thoughts didn’t ring quite true to me. I found the name of the cat, Fluffy, to be distractingly ordinary (it seems kind of like Jones – I know there are Fluffys out there, I’ve just never met one), and I also got pulled out by sentences like “Her mother was crying!” and “Was Mom jealous of the cat, too?” Those kinds of things were already in evidence by the descriptions/conversations at hand and didn’t necessarily need to be repeated. It seemed like a very quick and unrealistic resolution to a huge issue (Elaine is worried that her mother doesn’t love her) at the end. The reason I’m writing all of this is because I found some good writing in this story as well – sentences that were well-crafted and dug into things in a way I didn’t expect and was gratified to find. And all the faults I listed are things I do in my work, too, and am always trying to be aware of. Hopefully, this was a helpful comment of some things to think about. Either way, good job on getting published in EDF and thanks for the story!

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