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THE PROMISE • by Warren C. Easley

Momma always said I slept like a nervous bird. When I heard the front door click open that night, I got up and peeked down the hall. It was Momma’s new boyfriend, Duane, and he was just closing the door behind him.

He looked real surprised to see me. “Oh, hi, Sprout. Just havin’ a smoke outside.”

I hated it when he called me Sprout. My name’s Kat. “You must have smoked a pack, ‘cause I heard you go out a long time ago.”

He laughed, but his eyes got kind of small and hard. “One cigarette. You were dreaming.”

Early the next morning I heard Momma’s cell ring. Momma rushed into my room. “Kat, get up. Something’s happened to Pop Pop.” We drove over to my grandfather’s house. There were lots of police cars and flashing lights. Momma told me to stay in the car. I knew something awful had happened, and my heart sort of shriveled up in my chest.

I started thinking about the day before. I was at Pop Pop’s house, teaching him how to use his new cell phone —

“Punch the number in first, then press the little green light. That sends the call.”

He chuckled the way he always does, specially when he’s laughing at himself. “I’m an old dog, Kat. It’s hard to teach me new tricks.”

He was gray and bent with big hands rough as tree bark, but his eyes had a kindness in them that shined like a light. “You’re not old,” I told him, “least not to me.”

Before I left, he hugged me and gave me a serious look. “How are things at home?”

I dropped my eyes. “All right.”

“That new fella, Duane, he’s treating you okay?”

“Yeah, I guess.”

“You guess?”

My face got a little hot. I didn’t like Duane, but couldn’t say why. “He’s okay.”

“Are they using?”

“I don’t know, Pop Pop. I keep to my room, mostly.”

He hugged me again. “Listen, now that you’ve taught me to use this phone, you can call me anytime, Kat. I promise I’ll ans — ”

I jumped when Momma opened the car door. She was all in tears. “Pop Pop got robbed last night,” she said.

“Is he okay?”

“No, Kat. He’s not. Pop Pop’s dead. The burglar killed him.”

Momma held me for a long time. When I stopped crying, she said, “Kat, the police want to talk to you. Listen, honey, they don’t like Duane ‘cause he’s got a record. Don’t say nothin’ bad about him, okay?”

“Momma, he went out last night. I heard him.”

She gripped my shoulders so hard it hurt. “No, he didn’t, Kat. He was with me. Don’t say that to the police. Please, honey. Duane’s a good man.”

I talked to a nice police lady and didn’t say anything bad about Duane or Momma. Another policeman came in and the nice lady excused herself and joined him across the room. I looked down at the hole in the toe of my sneaker like I wasn’t listening, but I was. “The murder weapon’s missing,” he said in a low tone. “Something heavy, like a hammer.” She told the man about Pop Pop’s cell phone. The man nodded and said, “That’s missing, too, along with his wallet and cash.”

When everything in the apartment got quiet that night, I snuck out of my room. Duane kept his tools on a shelf next to the washer. I pulled a chair up and looked for his hammer. I’d used it just the other day and knew it had red paint on the handle. The hammer was gone.

“Whatcha lookin’ for, Sprout?” I jerked around and there was Duane. A cigarette dangled from the side of his mouth, and his eyes were all hard again, like little stones.

A pack of spiders crawled down my back. “Uh, a screw driver,” I answered, pulling one out of the tool box and adding real fast, “You’re not supposed to smoke in the apartment.”

He blew smoke from his nose and smiled like a snake. “Things are gonna change around here, Sprout. We’re gonna move out of this dump into your granddad’s house.”

I lay in bed with my door locked, trying to think what to do. When I finally dozed off, I dreamed about Pop Pop. He smiled down at me, held up his cell phone and said, “You can call me anytime , Kat. I promise I’ll answer.”

I woke up and snuck Momma’s cell phone from the hall table. When I tapped in Pop Pop’s number, it rang several times before going to voice mail — “Hi, this is Claude. Leave a message.” He did answer me! When I heard his voice, I knew what I needed to do.

I slipped out the front door and ran down 4th Avenue till I got to the alley that cut through to Pop Pop’s street. The alley was the fastest way back from his house to our apartment. There were a few lights along the narrow path, but it was mostly dark and scary in there.

I started down the alley, dialing Pop Pop’s number again and again. My legs were shaking, but the sound of his voice kept me going. Halfway in I heard it — the ring tone I’d put on his phone. It came from a humongous trash can under a dim light. I took the lid off and pulled hard on the lip of the can, tipping it over with a crash. Dogs started barking up and down the alley. I didn’t care.

I sifted through the smelly garbage till I found a plastic bag that buzzed with Pop Pop’s ring tone. The bag was tied shut, but a wooden handle with red paint on it had punched through the side. I put the lighted face of my phone up to the handle and saw a clear fingerprint in blood.

I dialed 911 and sat down to wait.

Warren C. Easley lives in Oregon, where he writes fiction and tutors GED students. He’s the author of the Cal Claxton Mystery Series: learn more at www.WarrenEasley.com.

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THE PROMISE • by Warren C. Easley, 4.1 out of 5 based on 96 ratings
Posted on September 8, 2012 in Mystery/Suspense, Stories
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30 Responses to “THE PROMISE • by Warren C. Easley”

  1. Irena P. Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 1:47 am

    An excellent read. Well done!

  2. Helen Francesca Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 2:02 am

    Thank God for the happy ending !
    Well-constructed , let’s hear it for the kid !

  3. Paul A. Freeman Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 3:04 am

    Phew! What an exciting roller-coaster ride. Well constructed, well-written, great ending!

  4. Johanna Miklos Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 4:56 am

    Thanks to TV, kids know exactly what to do to solve a crime.

  5. Mary Markstrom Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 6:31 am

    A great story. Very well paced. It had me hooked from the start and a very satisfying ending. 5 stars.

  6. Robert Curreli Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 6:50 am

    Wow! Swell story, Warren. Amazing how you created believable characters, suspense and a satisfying ending in under a thousand words.

  7. Erin Ryan Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 8:05 am

    Poor Pop-Pop.

  8. Laura McHale Holland Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 8:18 am

    Oh, what a good story. The pace was superb, didn’t bog down at all. Plus I was emotionally invested. Thanks for a fine read.

  9. Warren Easley Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 8:50 am

    Thanks all for the kind comments. I loved writing this story. There are a lot of brave kids out there…

  10. Dirk Knight Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 9:09 am

    I like it more. Because is the same type of stories I write. Kids as protags, a little mystery, some drug abuse, and at least one murder. Perfect cocktail.

  11. Joe Gurvis Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 9:53 am

    A good effort. Doesn’t really ring true. Much longer than it needs to be.

  12. Sarah Crysl Akhtar Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 11:49 am

    Wonderful. Five star story.

  13. Gretchen Bassier Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 12:37 pm

    Great voice. Brave, smart kid. Well done.

  14. PaisleyGreen Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 1:03 pm

    Awesome from beginning to end. Great pacing and tone.

  15. Kim Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 2:31 pm

    Loved it! Strong voice, great pacing, very sympathetic MC. And all in under 1,000 words. Nicely done.

  16. Jennifer Ripley Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 4:14 pm

    Nice. Simple, straightforward story with lots of nice details woven in and some excellent prose to polish it off. Great job.

  17. Gery Blackburn Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 4:38 pm

    Very enjoyable. Can’t wait for your next one

  18. Phil Atkisson Says:
    September 8th, 2012 at 5:59 pm

    Warren, as good or perhaps even better than “to Catch a Wolf”.

  19. Mary c Whitton Says:
    September 9th, 2012 at 12:46 am

    I really enjoyed your story…very well done…I really felt the intensity of the characters!

  20. JenM Says:
    September 9th, 2012 at 11:25 am

    I really liked this one. A murder mystery without a lot of horror elements, this would be perfect for young kids to read as well as being interesting for adults.

  21. Antony N Britt Says:
    September 9th, 2012 at 12:08 pm

    Excellent piece. My kind of story.

  22. Edith Says:
    September 9th, 2012 at 7:39 pm

    What a fine story…Kat is a neat kid!

  23. Ali Says:
    September 9th, 2012 at 11:57 pm

    Wonderful story! You nailed the voice and I love the way you give us full characters in such a short piece. Well done.

  24. Carol Says:
    September 10th, 2012 at 10:39 am

    Kudos Cousin,
    Hope it’s fun to create a believable story with a challenge of brevity. Keep up the great job. Carol

  25. Jeanette Arnett Says:
    September 11th, 2012 at 4:22 pm

    Warren: How exciting. I feel so sorry for the kid, want to hear more! Jeanette

  26. Janice Maxson Says:
    September 19th, 2012 at 9:43 pm

    Good ending, nice tension, the story all came together really well. I liked the kid and also Pop Pop, even though he was off scene, he was a presence.

  27. Sonia Easley Says:
    September 21st, 2012 at 3:48 pm

    I had to read it again! Great job.

  28. Shelley Hallman Says:
    September 21st, 2012 at 4:27 pm

    Warren, really enjoyed this story. Glad Sonia posted the link on fb. It is the 2nd one I’ve read, am thinking I will have to check out your series.
    PS.. I am a “shirt-tail relative” My Mother-in-law is an Easley grandchild out of Berry County Missouri, Julia Easley Williams was her Grandmother, daughter of Edward and Mary Elizabeth Easley. Her father is one of the children raised by the Grandparents after Julia’s death. Their farm is under water now due to the dam of Roaring River.

  29. Nikki Says:
    September 22nd, 2012 at 7:15 pm

    Wonderful story. I can’t wait to read more from you.

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