Comments on: WHAT THE PAINTER SAW • by Lori Ann Bloomfield http://www.everydayfiction.com/what-the-painter-saw-by-lori-ann-bloomfield/ The once a day flash fiction magazine. Sat, 20 Mar 2010 18:23:48 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: A Writer’s Notebook: Introduction « Samuel Snoek-Brown http://www.everydayfiction.com/what-the-painter-saw-by-lori-ann-bloomfield/comment-page-1/#comment-22154 A Writer’s Notebook: Introduction « Samuel Snoek-Brown Thu, 18 Feb 2010 07:40:12 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/what-the-painter-saw-by-lori-ann-bloomfield/#comment-22154 [...] I mentioned this to Lori Ann Bloomfield, she brought up visual artists and the importance of sketches and painted studies, of trying out new skills or toying with ideas [...] [...] I mentioned this to Lori Ann Bloomfield, she brought up visual artists and the importance of sketches and painted studies, of trying out new skills or toying with ideas [...]

]]> By: P.M.Lawrence http://www.everydayfiction.com/what-the-painter-saw-by-lori-ann-bloomfield/comment-page-1/#comment-21382 P.M.Lawrence Sat, 23 Jan 2010 00:43:53 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/what-the-painter-saw-by-lori-ann-bloomfield/#comment-21382 Sir James, you writing that is like someone telling a vegetarian, say, that he knew for a fact that the vegetarian didn't care whether he ate meat or not; it's offensive for insisting to my face that I am something I'm not. Who cares? Why, <I>I</I> care, just as much as someone would care if he knew London and read a story which had Big Ben right next to the Tower of London. The story pulls you up short, from having something you know is not true - if you just happen to know it. If you don't know, you don't notice, but it still traps the unwary. Here, the story talks about the Mona Lisa on canvas. Now, I happened - by sheer chance - to know that in the 16th century portraits were painted on thin panels of wood, because I had heard that there had been trouble restoring some of Holbein's work because of that. So this grated, just as much as hearing of Lincoln being driven to the White House in a car would. Even so, I went and checked about the Mona Lisa, and I found out that it really had been painted on a panel, which happened to made of poplar. So, yes, the author <I>did</I> do a great job of getting my attention - on that point where it got stopped dead, and so the story destroyed its own flow. So it was <I>not</I> successful, it caused a blockage on the anachronism. Even fiction needs good background. Sir James, you writing that is like someone telling a vegetarian, say, that he knew for a fact that the vegetarian didn’t care whether he ate meat or not; it’s offensive for insisting to my face that I am something I’m not. Who cares? Why, I care, just as much as someone would care if he knew London and read a story which had Big Ben right next to the Tower of London. The story pulls you up short, from having something you know is not true – if you just happen to know it. If you don’t know, you don’t notice, but it still traps the unwary.

Here, the story talks about the Mona Lisa on canvas. Now, I happened – by sheer chance – to know that in the 16th century portraits were painted on thin panels of wood, because I had heard that there had been trouble restoring some of Holbein’s work because of that. So this grated, just as much as hearing of Lincoln being driven to the White House in a car would. Even so, I went and checked about the Mona Lisa, and I found out that it really had been painted on a panel, which happened to made of poplar.

So, yes, the author did do a great job of getting my attention – on that point where it got stopped dead, and so the story destroyed its own flow. So it was not successful, it caused a blockage on the anachronism. Even fiction needs good background.

]]> By: Sir James http://www.everydayfiction.com/what-the-painter-saw-by-lori-ann-bloomfield/comment-page-1/#comment-21369 Sir James Fri, 22 Jan 2010 16:37:41 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/what-the-painter-saw-by-lori-ann-bloomfield/#comment-21369 I'm not much of a critic....and worse I am a horrible writer, but i do like fiction. I had to comment on this once I read some of the other comments, in regards to the "facts" some of you have made to a fiction short story....I can understand micro managing the facts if for a example: a Biography, or journal...Or even a autobiography, but when it is short fiction get a life and be concerned about yourself, after all what have you published? A "poplar panel" what the f@#k is that and who cares...? I'm sure if I am in art school that would matter but in everyday fiction who cares. I think the author did a great job getting your attention..therefore the story was successful I’m not much of a critic….and worse I am a horrible writer, but i do like fiction. I had to comment on this once I read some of the other comments, in regards to the “facts” some of you have made to a fiction short story….I can understand micro managing the facts if for a example: a Biography, or journal…Or even a autobiography, but when it is short fiction get a life and be concerned about yourself, after all what have you published? A “poplar panel” what the f@#k is that and who cares…? I’m sure if I am in art school that would matter but in everyday fiction who cares. I think the author did a great job getting your attention..therefore the story was successful

]]> By: Trevor http://www.everydayfiction.com/what-the-painter-saw-by-lori-ann-bloomfield/comment-page-1/#comment-11147 Trevor Fri, 09 Jan 2009 23:37:15 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/what-the-painter-saw-by-lori-ann-bloomfield/#comment-11147 I really enjoyed this story. It had great flow and I took to the characters immediately. I never saw Mona as having much of a personality, but you've brought out something very genuine and unique. Bravo! I really enjoyed this story. It had great flow and I took to the characters immediately. I never saw Mona as having much of a personality, but you’ve brought out something very genuine and unique. Bravo!

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