Comments on: XIIN • by Mark Harding http://www.everydayfiction.com/xiin-by-mark-harding/ The once a day flash fiction magazine. Mon, 15 Mar 2010 02:35:30 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.9.2 hourly 1 By: Tom Pollock http://www.everydayfiction.com/xiin-by-mark-harding/comment-page-1/#comment-1821 Tom Pollock Sat, 01 Dec 2007 08:51:16 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/xiin-by-mark-harding/#comment-1821 Wow Mark, You kicked up a storm over this one. Its much, much better than the last time I saw it. I do kinda see what people meant about the end, but I think the clarity of the resolution was worth it. I don't actually think it was the POV shift that was that jarred, as it gave nice symmetry with the other POV shift, but the Jump from apparently relationship rupturing problem to 'happy families solution' (I exagerrate for brevity) did kinda undercut some of the seriousness of what went before. Still really enjoyed it though, much more now that I know what actually happened at the end. P.S for anyone else reading this - I was there when Mark workshopped this prior to publication, it has NOT been published anywhere else. Wow Mark,

You kicked up a storm over this one.

Its much, much better than the last time I saw it.

I do kinda see what people meant about the end, but I think the clarity of the resolution was worth it.
I don’t actually think it was the POV shift that was that jarred, as it gave nice symmetry with the other POV shift, but the Jump from apparently relationship rupturing problem to ‘happy families solution’ (I exagerrate for brevity) did kinda undercut some of the seriousness of what went before.

Still really enjoyed it though, much more now that I know what actually happened at the end.

P.S for anyone else reading this – I was there when Mark workshopped this prior to publication, it has NOT been published anywhere else.

]]> By: Mark Harding http://www.everydayfiction.com/xiin-by-mark-harding/comment-page-1/#comment-1617 Mark Harding Mon, 19 Nov 2007 18:21:03 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/xiin-by-mark-harding/#comment-1617 Thanks for your comments KJ - I'm very pleased you liked it. Obviously great (or weird) minds think alike. I suspect there is more that could be done with the subject, so I don't think xIin is the definitive treatment! Thanks for your comments KJ – I’m very pleased you liked it. Obviously great (or weird) minds think alike. I suspect there is more that could be done with the subject, so I don’t think xIin is the definitive treatment!

]]> By: KJ http://www.everydayfiction.com/xiin-by-mark-harding/comment-page-1/#comment-1608 KJ Mon, 19 Nov 2007 03:12:50 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/xiin-by-mark-harding/#comment-1608 This charmed me quite a bit. I've wondered before about this very subject, actually (a totally new emotion), and I like how you've treated it. (I'm also a bit jealous that you've already used the idea, but oh well, that's what I get for not writing about it when the thought occured to me.) This charmed me quite a bit. I’ve wondered before about this very subject, actually (a totally new emotion), and I like how you’ve treated it. (I’m also a bit jealous that you’ve already used the idea, but oh well, that’s what I get for not writing about it when the thought occured to me.)

]]> By: Michael A. Kechula http://www.everydayfiction.com/xiin-by-mark-harding/comment-page-1/#comment-1384 Michael A. Kechula Sat, 03 Nov 2007 03:41:36 +0000 http://www.everydayfiction.com/xiin-by-mark-harding/#comment-1384 Hi Jordan, From the reactions I'm receiving about my comments, I don't see any point in making any further comments. I didn't realise that this site was supposed to be a mutual admiration society. Good luck to all, and keep writing. Regards, Michael A. Kechula Hi Jordan,

From the reactions I’m receiving about my comments, I don’t see any point in making any further comments. I didn’t realise that this site was supposed to be a mutual admiration society.

Good luck to all, and keep writing.

Regards,

Michael A. Kechula

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